How is this poem.....................?

In a sunlit garden


I raised beautiful flowers


three were roses





Three beautiful roses


sprouted from hopeless seeds


my special roses


I kept dear in my garden





Among them, on I deeply admired


she was most bright and brilliant


radiating its sunny love in my garden


Too much for a weak soul like mine





I grew withdrawn from its presence


watching after it from a distance


As I moved farther away,


the rose grew sad and cried


as the wind blew us apart





Its tears moisting the soil


Its eyes looking toward the sun


where other gardeners


in greed and envy


snatched her away from me





As for the second rose


its roots were never really in my garden


At the slightest distraction,


other boundaries crossed mine


and now possessed her





With a lesser and emptier garden remaining


I looked to my last rose


Though not as pretty as the others


she had a firm grip in the soil


I drew her closer to me





A cold stone wall built


around the garden now graying


freezing all intimate feeling


She could not bear the chilling wind


and went elsewhere





Now I stand


in my once sunlit garden


an empty spot


I sleep in this


cold and deserted graveyard


which I built in my heart

How is this poem.....................?
Wow! This poem is so beautiful! It has really touched my heart. To be honest, a few parts didn't flow perfectly and in the fifth stanza the word moisting should be moistening (sorry to be finicky!) but this is better than a lot of published poems that I've read! Thank you so much for sharing. You definately have a new fan!
Reply:This is superb! I couldn't stop reading it - waiting to see what was next to come. Written, nice and tightly. Again, great poem. Thank you for sharing.
Reply:It's such a beautiful story!
Reply:one word... WOW!!!
Reply:wow nice, i really like it :)
Reply:Beautiful.
Reply:love it.
Reply:beautiful
Reply:LOVE it !!!!


such a neat story behind it all =]


great!



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