What do you think of my poem, " God Loves Me And You Don't" ? Please tell me what you think!?

YOU LOVE ME SO MUCH


THAT’S WHAT YOU SAY


BUT WHEN HE CALLS


YOU DISAPPER


FOR THE REST OF THE DAY


YOU LEAVE ME SITTING HERE SO COLD


AND UNDONE


WHAT AM I SUPPOST TO DO FOR FUN


WHEN YOU’RE WITH HIM YOU RATTLE FOR HOURS


HE’S SUCH A BLESSING


HE’S LIKE A BUNDLE OF FLOWERS





BUT THAT’S NOT WHAT I THINK


NO NEVER


HE’LL ALWAYS BE SO WHATEVER


HE PLAYS YOU ON


AGAIN AND AGAIN


FOR HIM YOURE LIKE A SIDEKICK


HE’S LIKE A BIG DOG WAITING TO LICK


MAKE YOU SO HAPPY


AND FOR WHAT


SO HE CAN JUST HURT YOU AGAIN


IT MAKES ME WANT TO KICK HIS BUTT





I STAND UP FOR YOU


BUT YOU ALWAYS PUT ME DOWN


WHENEVER I TRY TO TALK


YOU JUST TURN AROUND


IT’S LIKE IM JUST A HUGE BRICK WALL


WAITING SO LONG


IM SO OLD I WILL PROBABLY SOON FALL


WHEN YOU LEAVE YOU DON’T KNOW HOW BAD YOU HURT ME


I HAVE NO FRIENDS, YOU KNOW THAT


BUT YET YOU WANT TO DESERT ME





THERE WILL SOON BE A DAY


WHEN YOUR ALONE AND YOU WANT TO PLAY


THEN FINALLY I MIGHT HAVE A LIFE


AFTER I PUT UP WITH ALL OF THIS STRIFE


I HAVE A HOME AND A CAR OF MY OWN


I WONT EVEN ASK YOU FOR A MISLY LOAN


I WILL MAKE IT


WITH MY HUSBAND AND KIDS


THEN YOU WILL WISH


YOU WOULDVE STAYED ALL OF THOSE NIGHTS


WHEN I WAS ALONE, AND YOU TURNED OFF THE LIGHTS


YOU WILL SEE


SEE THE REAL ME


YOU WILL SEE WHAT YOU MISSED





IT’S YOUR FAULT THAT YOU LEFT


YOU LEFT ME FOR DEATH


I FOUND MY LIFE


BY MYSELF


AND NOW YOU FEEL SO ALONE


LIKE I FELT WHEN YOU LEFT ME AT HOME


YOU WANT TO COME OVER


AND VISIT MY KIDS


BUT I SAY NO





I KICK YOU OUT OF MY LIFE


LIKE YOU DID ME


NOW YOU SEE


WHAT YOU DID


WAS SO DUMB


YOU SEE HOW


YOU MADE MY HEART FEEL SO NUMB





YOU MADE ME FEEL LIKE I WASN’T WANTED


LIKE I WAS YOUR SIDEKICK


LIKE YOU WERE FOR HIM


DO YOU REALLY WANT TO BE A MONSTER


WHO HURTS AND SCREWS WITH PEOPLE


THEY THINK YOUR THERE


AND THE NEXT THING YOUR GONE


WE HAD KNOW INTEREST THAT WE COULD SHARE


BUT HOW DO WE REALLY KNOW WHEN YOU JUST LEFT ME THERE





SINCE I AM MORE OF A PERSON


THEN OTHERS I QUOTE


I INVITE YOU TO FLOAT UNPON MY BOAT


I WELCOME YOU INTO MY LIFE


SEE WHAT IVE MADE


BY PUTTING DOWN THAT KNIFE


I WAS CLOSE TO TAKING MY LIFE





BUT NOW I NO IM NOT HERE FOR YOUR SATISFACTION IM HERE BECAUSE GOD LOVES ME AND HE WANTED ME ON THIS PLANET





HE WANTED MORE PEOPLE LIKE ME AND LESS OF YOU


HE ALWAYS KNOWS THE RIGHT THING TO DO


I LOVE HIM BACK


SO MUCH IN MY HEART


I GUESS HE ALWAYS WAS IN A WAY RIGHT FROM THE START

What do you think of my poem, " God Loves Me And You Don't" ? Please tell me what you think!?
"YOU DISAPPER


FOR THE REST OF THE DAY"





I'd put that all in one line like so, "You disapper for the rest of the day" With it being in two different lines I feel like pausing in between them which just makes me confused after "you dissapear."





Other than that, I really like it, Good job, you have quite a talent! Keep it up!





Jane
Reply:who can learn a lot


is a typoid what they got


but all the ways to youse your voice


doesnt truly come from personal choice


but a comment you might think


but what is it when it is in ink



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