What poetic form is this?

I have written a poem that i want to use for my university portfolio but im not sure which form it would be classed as, can you help?





Mistreated rose





The rose you curved from observation


And turned to face the wall


Now I’m somewhat dwindled


As my distinctive features fall





Now I appear as I’m expected


Silent, alone


An isolated fixture


Whilst the imitated roam





A vase run on expectance


My difference disallowed


Flowers of a perfect nature


Petals shining proud





The Outcast forced to solitude


For my deficient perfection


Sheltered from scrutiny


Bewildered from affection





Curved towards darkness


From my fellow constellation


Withering increasingly


Before the adverse congregation





Shadowed by surrounding beauty


My stem so weak and small


Intensified dehydration


My head begins to fall





Desperation surrounds me


Dismantled and afraid


I die within this obscurity


For my dissimilar ways

What poetic form is this?
It's lyric.





How do roses roam?





Also, roses don't live in space.
Reply:i'd say it's assonance, which is basically getting the rhyme wrong. the way in which you rhyme two words which do not rhyme, but rhyme them in such a way in which they do rhyme.


i.e: afraid and ways do not rhyme, but put into a phrase, (dismantled and afraid...dissimilar ways) they sound alike, so assonance fools the brain into believing that they do rhyme.
Reply:If you are submitting it as part of a creative writing portfolio, you don't need to classify it. When I did my portfolio we were not required to.


You seem to have an imperfect rhyme, but even syllable count on alternate lines. (lines 2 +4 rhyme, whilst 1 +3, and 2+ 4 have equal syllable counts, in most stanzas).


Is there any way you could make it into a sonnet? (by combining pairs of lines, and re-drafting the final four lines into a rhyming couplet.) Just an idea, as you have 28 lines, and the topic is a good one for the sonnet form.
Reply:Nearly very good poem !
Reply:It's almost in ballad or hymn meter, which technically has a rhyme scheme of xaxa, xbxb, and so on. You've got that. The only problem with categorizing it as ballad meter is that you'd need to regularize your meter so that all odd lines had 4 feet (or four stresses, depending on your scansion) and all even lines had 3. I don't know what that kind of monkeying around would do to the poem, so you could keep it like it is and call it a loose ballad.
Reply:It's called 'heroic epic for daffodils'. I remember Sir Chupacabras inventing the genre when in short trousers.- those were the days!



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